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Wednesday, July 2, 2014

World UFO Day

Today at Poets United, I included a poem of mine in Midweek Motif ~ Half Year and also World UFO Day.  



Consider the poem I wrote:

UFOs exist
only if we see them
which makes themquite
different from God and leaves
and friends and hearts
which cannot be
hidden

Once seen
even the worlds
of fiction are aware of
us watching and comparing
but UFO’s can even leave
alien visitors invisibly—
without a story they
cannot exit



Versus the one I revised and published as part of the prompt Midweek Motif ~ Half Year and also World UFO Day:


What Exists
BY SUSAN CHAST  © 2014

UFOs exist
only if we see them
which makes them quite
different from God and leaves
and friends and hearts
which cannot be
locked up.

Even worlds
of fiction have properties
of reality no matter how far-fetched
but UFOs from afar and their
uninvited guests—
(we are told) do
  not exist. 



What do you think?  "Hidden" or "Locked up"?  "Once seen" or "Even worlds"?  "Aware of watching" or "reality"?  

Which is more ironic?

What's your UFO story?






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